手机APP下载

您现在的位置: 首页 > 高中英语 > 高考英语作文 > 高考作文精品范例 > 正文

2013年高考英语北京卷英语作文点评

来源:可可英语 编辑:max   可可英语APP下载 |  可可官方微信:ikekenet

[2013年高考英语北京卷英语开放作文原题展示]

2013年高考英语北京卷英语作文
[2013年高考英语北京卷英语开放作文写作指导]
2013年高考英语北京卷开放作文依然是一篇漫画作文,有一定的思想深度。根据漫画作文的写作方法,作者应该首先简述漫画的内容,从而引出其所要揭示的问题或现象,然后分析漫画的深层含义,总结它所展示出的教育意义、表达出自己的感想。
漫画作文的审题非常重要,如果审题失误,就会导致全盘皆输。不过这个漫画的寓意还是非常明显:鱼钩上是现实—“一条小鱼”,而头脑中是梦想—“一条大鱼”,所以暗含的是现实与梦想之间的差距。并可以将话题延伸至面对生活的态度,当现实与梦想不一致时,我们应该采取什么样的心态。本篇漫画作文可能涉及的主要语言素材包括:face the reality(面对现实);rise to challenges(迎接挑战),keep a positive attitude(保持积极的心态);a smooth sailing(一帆风顺),keep every steady step(步步为营),fight to realize my dream(努力拼搏去实现梦想), part with dreams(丢下梦想)。

[2013年高考英语北京卷开放作文满分作文展示]
From this picture, we can see a man is fishing a river. Though dreaming about a big fish, he actually harvests a very tiny one.
I think the picture is telling us that there is always a difference between one's dream and reality (高级句式,宾语从句). Everyone has his dreams. However, it is not so easy for people to realize their dreams every time (高级句习式,it作形式主语).
In my opinion (高级短语), we should never part with our dreams,(高级表达) because if dreams are gone, we may still exist, but we have ceased to live. However, if the reality comes against our dream, we should accept it and try to learn from our failures. With another try (高级句式,with结构), we may finally gain what we dream of (高级句式,主从复合句).

[2013年高考英语北京卷开放作文失分作文分析]
The picture showed (动词时态错误,应用一般现在时) that a fisherman dreamed to catch a big fish with his fishing pole, but actually, he just caught a very small one. He was so sad. This situation shows us the difference between dream and reality. In our life, people always plan well and practice hard to get what we (代词错误,指代主语,用第三人称复数they) want. But the result is different, even opposite. In the case, we (与前文主语不一致,应用they) should insist on our (指代不一致,应用their) dream and keep on trying. They can realize their dream soon or later (固定短语错误,应为sooner or later).

结语:
2013年高考英语北京卷开放作文选择了一幅很有深意的漫画,它暗示着人生中的一个重大哲理。在写这样开放式漫画作文的时候,考生务必要正确审题,并按照漫画作文写作的常规逻辑进行结构上的合理安排。近年来高考英语中漫画作文很多,学习者也可以参考本站相关文章:2013年江苏高考英语书面表达点评;2013年高考英语福建卷书面表达评析。

重点单词   查看全部解释    
pole [pəul]

想一想再看

n. 杆,柱,极点
v. (用杆)支撑

 
smooth [smu:ð]

想一想再看

adj. 平稳的,流畅的,安祥的,圆滑的,搅拌均匀的,可

 
steady ['stedi]

想一想再看

adj. 稳定的,稳固的,坚定的
v. 使稳固

 

发布评论我来说2句

    最新文章

    可可英语官方微信(微信号:ikekenet)

    每天向大家推送短小精悍的英语学习资料.

    添加方式1.扫描上方可可官方微信二维码。
    添加方式2.搜索微信号ikekenet添加即可。