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 雅思话题作文范文:老外雅思9分例文及点评

  下面这篇在2004年考过两次,内容比较难写,很多考生都构思不出内容,因此,我请我的美国朋友按照雅思作文的套路写了篇范文,大家可以学习一下里面的语言和内容。

  Unlike most countries, the police in the United Kingdom do not normally carry guns. Some people think it leaves the citizens unprotected, while others believe that this practice reduces the overall violence in society. Discuss both views and use your own experience and evidence.

  Unlike most countries, the police in the United Kingdom do not normally carry guns. Some people think it leaves citizens unprotected, while others believe that this practi c e reduces the overall violence in society. Police having guns however is an issue secondary to criminals having guns. (45words)

  结构分析:2+1模式,最后一句为主题句,明确地表达了自己的观点。但是,前两句的问题很严重,即照抄了题目。(这可能是我和老外没有沟通好,在他所写的所有例文中都出现了类似的情况,大家千万不要学!!!)

  Because criminals usually have access to guns, police officers need them in order to control crime. If police in the U.K. are able to go without guns and not have crime getting completely out of control then they have already set a fine example that other countries should follow. The fact that they are able to do this is an indication of their ability to control the flow of guns to the general populace and this makes citizens safer than anything else. To a civilian, taking guns away from criminals is more important than giving them to police. (98words)

  For places that are not able to, or are unwilling to control this availability of guns to criminals, police have no choice. Countries with weak or ineffective gun laws, or countries bordering such countries, like Mexico which has strong gun laws, but virtually no way to prevent them from being smuggled over the border from the U.S., need a police force that is not only armed, but is armed better than the criminals. This ‘domestic arms race’ is the fate of any country that does not realize that civilians have no need of being armed and should have no access to weapons whatsoever.(103words)

  The root of the problem is embarrassingly corrupt governments and ineffective half-measures taken to control the circulation of guns, which allows criminals to easily come into possession of guns. Nations around the world should hope to someday reach the point where their police force can afford not to carry guns and still be effective. (54words)

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possession [pə'zeʃən]

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n. 财产,所有,拥有

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overall [əuvə'rɔ:l]

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adj. 全部的,全体的,一切在内的
adv.

 
civilian [si'viljən]

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adj. 平民的
n. 罗马法专家,平民

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indication [.indi'keiʃən]

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n. 表示,指示,象征

 
domestic [də'mestik]

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adj. 国内的,家庭的,驯养的
n. 家仆,

 
effective [i'fektiv]

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adj. 有效的,有影响的

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issue ['iʃju:]

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n. 发行物,期刊号,争论点
vi. & vt

 
corrupt [kə'rʌpt]

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adj. 腐败的,堕落的
vt. 使 ...

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evidence ['evidəns]

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n. 根据,证据
v. 证实,证明

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availability [ə.veilə'biliti]

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n. 有效,有用,有益;可得到的人(或物)

 


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