BRYSON: Right.Let's have a look at my notes here.OK.Starting with section headings...the broad divisions are good but you'll have to re-do the actual headings.I've made some suggestions in the margins...

AMINA: OK.Thanks.

BRYSON: Now,this information on local housing...I can see why you put it there but it really isn't relevant to the approach you've taken.

AMINA: I think I see what you mean.

BRYSON: Now...what did I say about the interviews?

AMINA: I worked very hard on those.I really thought they were valuable.

BRYSON: They are,Amina,but they're very complex and rather unclear at the moment.You're going to have to spend a bit of time making the data a lot clearer.

AMINA: OK...as long as I don't have to remove them altogether...

BRYSON: No,don't worry.

AMINA: What about the chronology...the list of dates?I wasn't sure whether I should rewrite those.

BRYSON: My advice on that is to take them out.I feel it makes the whole piece appear too simplistic.

AMINA: OK,if it'll help.