2015年4月11日雅思写作解析及语料库
　　Old people need employment, so, they have to compete with young people (for the same job), what problems it will cause? What are the solutions. 老人需要工作岗位，所以，他们要和年轻人竞争，这会引起哪些问题，如何解决?(新题出现)
　　考察主题：大学生择业难的影响和解决策略换成了老人和年轻人竞争工作岗位的影响和解决策略。
　　雅思题库：
　　1. 大学生择业难的影响和解决策略?
　　2. 老人是否应该55岁退休?
　　注意事项：本文考察的是问题影响 + 解决策略
　　写作目的：本文要探讨的是老人和年轻人竞争工作岗位可能带来的消极影响以及提出相关的解决的策略。
　　雅思布局图：
　　首段： 背景介绍　+　(问题影响) + 写作目的。
　　二段： 问题影响的展开：对于年轻人的影响;对于老年人的影响; 对于企业的影响。
　　三段： 相应的解决策略的展开：政府如何做;企业如何做;老人如何做。
　　尾段： 亮明观点 + (总结理由)
　　雅思思路拓展：
　　老人和年轻人竞争相同的工作岗位的影响：
　　1. 对于年轻人而言，年长求职者者拥有丰富的的工作经验和独特的智慧，这就增加了年轻人择业的压力，如果惯性地求职失败，年轻人也许会失去工作的动力，闲赋在家，成为啃老族。
　　2. 对于老人而言，他们的体能和精力已经使他们不能适合现代工作的高强度以及压力，即使求职成功，也会带来健康管理以及精神压力方面的问题。
　　3. 对于企业而言，年轻人和老人都有其择业的优势，但是，如果老人成为公司员工的主力，这就意味企业生产力和工作效率的下降。
　　如何解决年轻人和老人共同竞争工作岗位的矛盾：
　　1. 政府鼓励年轻人自我创业，提供相关的优惠策略，这样，即使年轻人在和老人竞争工作岗位失败后，依然有广阔的就业空间。
　　2. 企业可以邀请老人做顾问，付给象征性的工资，指导年轻人的工作，这既可以发挥了老人的经验和智慧，又给年轻人提供了就业的机会。
　　3. 对于老人而言，他们应该调整心态，享受晚年生活，所以，他们应该满足于退休的生活，寻找人生的其他的乐趣，而不是非要和年轻人竞争工作岗位，这样，年轻人有更多的就业的机会，老人可以偷得浮生半日闲。
　　雅思原创范文赏析：
　　首段：背景介绍 + 问题影响 + 写作目的
　　Notably, the competition between young job-seekers and senior job candidates is very fierce, which has a really adverse influence on young adults，the aged and relevant enterprises. In this essay，I will endeavor to explore the potential influence caused by the hot competition between young job-seekers and old job-hunters and then present my suggestions
　　解析：In this essay，I will endeavor to explore the potential influence caused by ……文本中，我将会努力探究下由……引起的不良的影响
　　解析：job candidates = job-seekers = job-hunters 求职者
　　二段：问题影响的展开
　　Virtually，under no circumstances can we ignore the negative influence triggered by the conflict between young job candidates and senior job-hunters. First, senior job candidates have accumulated rich experiences and wisdom，therefore， they tend to outshine young adults and thus increase the likelihood of youth unemployment. If youngsters constantly suffer from failure, then, they might feel unmotivated and frustrated. Therefore, they might end up becoming the bread-eaters of their families. Also, as for the old, their deteriorating energy and physique might make it hard for them to be competent at intense and stressful work. They might suffer both physically and psychologically even if they secure reasonable jobs. Last, if senior employees constitute the largest proportion of the company’s staff, then, it indicates the decline of productivity and efficiency of the enterprises.
　　解析：under no circumstances can we ignore the negative influence triggered by …… 任何情况下我们都不能忽视由于……引起的弊端
　　解析：outshine v 使某人相形见拙
　　解析：feel unmotivated and frustrated v感到失去动力，有挫败感
　　解析：end up doing sth v最终以……为结局
　　解析：bread-eaters n 只消费不赚钱的人
　　解析：be competent at …… v 能胜任……
　　解析：secure reasonable jobs v 找到理想的工作
　　解析：constitute the largest proportion of …… v组成最大的比例
　　三段：相应的解决策略的展开：
　　Considering the severity of this problem， it is high time that we started adopting effective measures. First, it is imperative for the government to encourage youngsters to embark on self-employment and provide relevant preferential policies, thereby, young people still have huge room for employment even though they are eliminated by the job competition. Further, it works to invite senior job-seekers to act as consultants for the companies and provide symbolic remuneration. In this way, both parties could put their talents into full play. Wise and experienced job candidates can provide ambitious and vigorous youngsters with guidance. Finally, on the part of the elderly, what is of the utmost importance is to adjust their mentalities, by that I mean, to enjoy the retirement life and seek other pleasure is more commendable for them. Instead of competing for the limited job vacancies, to smell the flowers is a win-win option both for the aged and the young.
　　解析：Considering the severity of this problem， it is high time that we started adopting effective measures. 考虑到问题的严重性，是我们采取有效的措施来解决问题的时候了。
　　解析：to encourage youngsters to embark on self-employment and provide relevant preferential polices 鼓励年轻人自我创业，并且提供相关的优惠政策。
　　解析：provide symbolic remuneration v 提供象征性的薪酬
　　解析：put their talents into full play v充分展示才华
　　解析：on the part of sb 对于某人而言
　　解析：what is of the utmost importance is to …… 真正重要的是去……
　　解析：by that I mean 我的意思是……
　　解析：is more commendable for them 对于他们而言更加值得赞美
　　解析：job vacancies n工作岗位
　　解析：to smell the flowers v偷得浮生半日闲
　　解析：a win-win option n 双赢的选择
　　尾段： 亮明观点 (时间不足，现场省略)
　　Overall，it is not an easy task to appropriately balance the job needs between the young and the old. Every method I have method has its unique merit，therefore，joint efforts should be made by the government，relevant enterprises and the individual job-hunters.
　　解析：Every method I have method has its unique merit，therefore，joint efforts should be made by ……，……，…… 我提及的方法都有其利好，因此，……，……，……应该共同努力
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