2015年7月4日雅思写作解析及语料库
　　小作文：柱形图：关于澳大利亚5——14岁的孩子在两个星期内的活动调查。
　　点评：柱形图的写作的原则为动态比较变化，静态比较高低(或者大小)
　　雅思写作语料库：鼓励年轻人做社会服务的利弊
　　2015年7月4日雅思写作解析
　　大作文：
　　Some people suggest that young adults should be encourage to do some unpaid jobs for the community, do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages for young people and the community? 有人建议我们应该鼓励年轻人做义务的社区服务，是否认为利大于弊?(经典旧题，年轻人做社区服务的利弊)
　　雅思题库中类似题目：
　　Unpaid community service, such as teaching local children sports skills, working for local charities and improving neighborhood relations, should be a compulsory part of secondary education. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 社区服务，例如教授孩子们体育技能，或者为慈善团体工作，或者是提高社区关系，应该成为中学教学大纲的一部分，是否认同?
　　Young adults should undertake unpaid work to help people in the community. To what extent do you think it brings more drawbacks to the community and the young adults than benefits? 年轻人应该被鼓励去做社区服务，是否认为弊大于利?(2006年9月23日)
　　* 雅思(托福)高分作文特征：
　　1. 题目为中心：一定明确回答问题，清晰论证问题
　　2. 逻辑为纲要：一定要有清晰的谋篇布局
　　3. 词汇为亮点：一定要选择精准，个性和多元的写作词汇
　　4. 句型为基础：一定要用符合学术英语写作的固定句式
　　作家立场：年轻人应该被鼓励去做义务的社区服务，因为这对于年轻人和社区都有利好。
　　思路拓展：
　　鼓励年轻人做社区服务的利好：
　　1. 在服务社区过程中，年轻人会加深对于社会的洞察，学习如何有效地和人交流交往，积累相关的工作经验， 这些都可以为年轻人未来的择业打下了坚实的基础。
　　2. 从精神成长的角度而言，年轻人做社区服务，尤其是帮助孤儿院的儿童或者是老人院的老人，有助于培养一个人的爱心，责任心，同情心，进而使人有一种积极善良的心态。
　　3.年轻人做社区服务，可以给社区带来直接的帮助，缓解他们的工作压力，也起到了示范的作用，鼓励更多的人帮助社区。
　　年轻人做社区服务的弊端：
　　1.鼓励年轻人做社区服务可能会分散学生们的精力，耽误他们的学习时间，甚至成为一些孩子们贪玩的借口。
　　2. 各种社区服务也是有严格工作要求的，如果一些年轻人们缺乏社区服务的知识，那么他们的工作不是帮忙，反而是添乱。
　　原创范文赏析：
　　首段：背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 作家立场
　　It is a common practice that young students in numerous countries are required to embark on a period of voluntary community service work. However， peoples' views differ greatly on this practice. To voice my opinion, those who are in the formative years should be motivated to undertake glorious community work, yet, its possible downsides should be emphasized
　　二段：鼓励年轻人做社区服务的利好的展开：
　　Granted， seen from the positive aspects, some merits could be gained via encouraging young students to be involved in unpaid community service. The most glaring virtue is that those who assume the responsibility of community work could learn how to care about others and provide concrete assistance. Meanwhile, it will enhance their sense of social responsibility and cultivate their loving hearts. Still, one's co-ordination ability, teamwork spirit and management ability could be promoted during the process of serving the community. Eventually, as for many city-born young people, it is the experience of community service that makes them become independent, sociable and cooperative.
　　三段：鼓励年轻人做社区服务的弊端的展开：
　　Nonetheless，under no circumstances can we ignore the potential drawbacks triggered by introducing unpaid community service into secondary school curriculums . First, the unpaid community service will surely occupy the finite and precious time of the students, which can otherwise be used in learning or building their bodies. Further, a great many students are too young or inexperienced to cope with the complicated community service. In this sense, instead of doing the community a favor, their voluntary activity might add burden to the community.
　　尾段：再次亮明观点
　　In closing, my stand is that although community service is a challenging task and might take up some time, the merits of encouraging students to do the community service outshine the demerits. Only by means of voluntary community work can we cultivate more and more responsible, well-behaved and caring social citizens.
　　解析：enable sb to brave new challenges in life v 使人可以面对生活中新的挑战
　　解析：Only by means of doing sth， can we ……只有通过…… 我们才能做……：
　　解析：responsible, well-behaved and caring adj有责任感的：行为规范的;有爱心的
　　原创社区服务基础写作语料库：
　　1. free community service free = unpaid voluntary community service = voluntary community service n 免费的社区服务
　　2. it is a common practice that ……这是一个很普遍的做法
　　3. it is not rare to see that …… 这一点很常见
　　4. the merits of doing sth far outweigh its possible demerits …… 的利大于弊
　　5. those who are in the formative years = young people = young man = youngster n年轻人
　　6. care about others and provide concrete assistance v关心他人以及提供具体的帮助
　　解析：concrete assistance n 具体的帮助
　　7. independent, sociable and cooperative adj独立的;善于社交的;有合作精神的
　　8. help the young acquire and accumulate a pool of relevant working experience v 帮助年轻人获得和积累大量相关的工作经验
　　9. The young adults should be involved in some unpaid community service 我们应该鼓励年轻人做一些免费的社区服务
　　10. …… can，to a large extent，enhance one's competitiveness in the future job-seeking v ……可以在很大程度上提高一个人未来的就业的优势
　　拓展: enhance one's efficiency of working 提高工作效率
　　11. one's sense of …… can be strongly promoted by doing sth 一个人的……可以被……推动
　　12. be spurred to do sth = be inspired to do sth = be motivated to do sth 某人被鼓励做 ……
　　13. to do sth is commendable and preferable …… 是值得赞美的可取的
　　解析：commendable adj值得赞美的：preferable adj可取的
　　14. a great many = a number of = numerous 许多的
　　15. ……is of great significance …… 是很重要的
　　16. It has been suggested that = an opinion springs up that …… 有人建议 ……
　　17. compulsory part = compelling part n必修课程
　　拓展：compel sb to do sth = oblige sb to do sth = force sb to do sth 迫使某人做……
　　18. learn to how to communicate and associate with others 学习如何和 ……交往交流
　　拓展：associate with sb v 和某人交往
　　拓展：…… is a good way to socialize ……是很好的社交的好方式
　　19. via embarking on unpaid community work v 通过做义务的社会服务
　　拓展： embark on v 从事……
　　20. sb can not only do sth but also do sth 某人不但可以做……而且可以做……