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Morning~AmyLee要认真规划好备考的每一天，你呢！非常感谢大家的陪伴，我们YY可可备考小组的成员越来越多了，不许偷懒，托福优秀范文一天写一篇学一篇哦，写好了可以发送至我邮箱keke3096@qq.com进行互批，共同进步!^^
我已经托福三战过了，对考试各方面都很熟悉，所以大家到考前了有什么疑惑也可以发邮件给我，我会尽力为大家解答。
每天的写作任务是这样的，写好每天的作文发至我的邮箱（如果你想加入作文批改小组请注明），我们将进入互批作文模式。
在此我对每天的topic进行解析和范文精讲，请大家写完作文之后不忘进行比较，找出自己的不足之处。开始吧！
41. Some people think that human needs forfarmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land forendangered animals. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view? Why orwhy not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
参考分析： 选择不同意更好写一些。列举两三个保护endangered animals的重要性。同时不要忘了说明人类也确实需要更多的土地。只不过不能只顾眼前利益(short term benefits)而已。 |
41、不同意人类对于农田、房屋和工业的需要要比保护濒危动物重要 |
Topic 41 Should land besaved for animals?
In the past, there have been many endangered animals. Nowthey are extinct. Does it matter? Has our environment been affected by theirabsence? Has the quality of our own life been changed? The answer to thesequestions is "Yes. "
It does matter if we destroy an endangered specieshabitat to develop more farmland, housing or industrial parks. There is adelicate balance of nature. If one small part is removed, it will affect allthe other parts. For example, if certain trees are cut down, bats will have noplace to roost. If they cannot roost, they cannot breed. If there are no bats,there will be no animal, or bird to eat certain insects that plague our crops.
Our environment has been affected by the absence of certainanimals. Certain flowers are pollinated by butterflies that migrate from Canada to Mexico. Some of the breedinggrounds of these butterflies were destroyed. Now these flowers are disappearingfrom certain areas. We will no longer be able to enjoy their beauty.
The quality of our life has been changed. America used tobe covered with giant trees. Now we have to visit them in one small park.Rainforests around the world are being cut down to make room for humans. Wewill never be able to see or study this fragile ecosystem.
I would encourage us humans to look for otheralternatives for our farmlands, housing, and industries. We have alternatives;the animals do not.
好了，今天就说这么多，大家一定要坚持练习作文，每天进步一小点，一个月下来托福写作绝对是质的提升！希望大家跟着我每天一篇练下去，写作都是硬功夫，跟小时候每周都要写语文作文是一样的，功夫到家自然成，加油！
最后再mention一下互评作文的事情，这个作文互评目前只有我在做，我希望尽可能给有需要的可可粉们提供帮助，如果你们中有愿意跟我一起批改大家作文的，一定要mail我加入哦！（互批可以进步非常快，做过才知道！）
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