Agree or disagree: It is more important for government to spend money on art museums and concert halls than on recreational facilities like swimming pool and playgrounds.

The two kind of thing that government should focus on mostly is people's mind and body. Therefore, deserved. But government should spend money on the recreational facilities or sports, because being health is the essence of people. Without it, people cannot do anything. Here are my reasons.

From low-age to high-age people, there are lots of sports people love a lot, like basketball, soccer, swimming and so on. And the advantage of doing sports, which can strengthen people's health, is different with spending money on art museums and concert which can improve people's mind, but it is more important because it is necessary for us to keep health when we are doing the daily work. Having a good health is the most important thing and the basic of every activity.

In addition, there are more demand from health than demand from mind. According to a survey the people who are going after the art is only a small part of the population, they have a high-level life. But more than 80percent people are not eligible. So as we can see, build more recreational facilities can satisfy more people and promote society stabilized.

While as I said art and music can perfect people's mind and cultivate taste and temperament, there are just hold a small proportion. Most of people cannot attain that level. Art belongs to one of the high Individual demand, but we still can see lots of people cannot afford their physiological demand. So it unsuitable to build the art museum and concert. Spending more on the basic facilities shows more important and suitable.

These all point shows that it is necessary for government spend more money on the recreationalfacilities.It is not only good for people, but also good for society improve and peaceful.

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