这篇study plan读下来显得有点空泛，建议内容方面再丰富一些。另外，注意变化句型句式。 So, when I was informed that school of Law in CAU in not available for international exchange students, I didn't get regretful, instead, I became exciting for I will get an opportunity to learn knowledge in another field （这句话较为中式，建议换个方式来表达，如 I feel excited and chanllenging when being informed that I could apply for another field instead of law in CAU）

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I'm XXX from XXX, female, major in law. After a two-year long study in law, I found out that a law school student should not only comprehend what is written in the codes, but also understand the society, especially the area in which we are going to practice law. So, when I was informed that school of Law in CAU in not available for international exchange students, I didn't get regretful, instead, I became exciting for I will get an opportunity to learn knowledge in another field.（这句话较为中式，建议换个方式来表达，如 I feel excited and chanllenging when being informed that I could apply for another field instead of law in CAU...）Among all the departments, I prefer to study in the school of business administration most, because I have been interested in business for a long time, and want to become a lawyer who has specialty in dealing with business-related matters. However, though my home university is famous for its law school, it has little strength in business administration education. Therefore, I would like to study in a comprehensive university which is professional in business administration, if the university is located in a developed country where the economic is prosperous, that will be great. Thus, to me, CAU is a perfect destination of an international exchange program.

I have taken several courses in commercial laws, such as Securities Law and Insurance Law and got high marks in the final exams. Besides, I took an internship in AIA Group Limited (Hong Kong) through a summer program last year. AIA Group Limited is the biggest insurance company in Hong Kong, during my work there, I communicated to their managers and staffs, gained a lot of beneficial experience.（内容较为空洞，建议列举具体的实例说明）Although my internship in Hong Kong isn't long-lasted, I learned many useful knowledge in business administration and insurance and get more interested in business administration from then on.

As I have mentioned, I highly appreciated the education offered in CAU, because is ranked 6th among universities in Korea, and is regarded as the first-choice university by Korean students. The first time I read the motto to CAU, I was deeply move, Die in justice, live in righteousness, it is also the goal I am purchasing.

Except all of the spiritual motivation, I have some detailed study plan. First, I going to enhance my linguistic ability. I will learn and practice Korean before and during my exchange program at CAU so that I can adapt to the environment quickly and communicate to local students easily. What's more, enhancing my reading and writing skills in English must be important. I will definitely keep practicing and make sure I can finish the program without the handicap of language. Second, I plan to learn some theories and practical skills in business administration. I will choose courses like international business, management science, marketing and consumer behavior etc. if permitted. I have already bought some related books, with then I can prepare those lessons in the coming summer holiday and understand the courses in CAU better. After I come back to my home university, i will combine my knowledge in business and law, and continue chasing my dream as a good lawyer（如果是要凑够字数，建议加一些描述学校的优势之类的话，或者提及自己的喜好等，以此进一步说明自己非常适合来CAU读书）.

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总的来说，这篇study plan读下来显得有点空泛，建议内容方面再丰富一些。另外，注意变化句型句式。