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【范文赏析】
【首段】 背景介绍 + 作家立场
Alarmingly, various misdeeds among teenagers ranging from school bullying or sex assault are now becoming big headaches in many countries. Juvenile delinquency not only afflicts the victims but also jeopardizes the community. Many efforts have already been made on how to crack down juvenile crime, but, the effect is far from satisfying. This essay aims to represent relevant measures of penalties.
【解析】
1. juvenile delinquency = teenage crime = youth crime n 青少年犯罪
2. afflict = agonize = distress v 使痛苦
3. jeopardize the community = endanger the society v 危害社会
4. crack down juvenile crime v降低青少年犯罪
5. measures of penalty = measures of punishment n 惩罚措施
【二段】 对于初次犯罪者或过失犯罪者的处罚措施：
Nobody is innate perpetrator，during the journey of life，those who are in the formative years are，sometimes，derailed by manifold causes such as the negative influence of negative mass media, the disadvantaged family background or external factors. In this sense, stricter penalty for the first offenders, unintentional lawbreakers is far from rational, especially when taking the teenagers’ immature mentality into account. Virtually, appropriate punishment is commendable, to motivate those juvenile offenders to serve the community or sweeping the street can be reasonable measures.
【解析】
1. Nobody is innate perpetrator. 人性本善
2. In this sense, stricter penalty for the first offenders, unintentional lawbreakers is far from rational, especially when taking the teenagers’ immature mentality into account. 因此，对于初犯者或者过失犯罪者，重罚远非理性，尤其当我们考虑到他们不成熟的心智的时候。
3. To motivate those juvenile offenders to serve the community or sweeping the street can be reasonable measures. 鼓励少年犯服务社区或者清扫街道都是合理的措施。
【解析】sweep v打扫(尤其是用大柄扫把清扫街道)
【拓展】The economic crisis is sweeping across the world. 经济危机正在席卷全球。
【三段】 为何不能固定刑罚，其他处罚措施有哪些：
Notwithstanding all that，taking the effects of a misconduct and its motivation into consideration is a prerequisite for ensuring justice of the law. There should not be fixed punishment for all youth crime. Some misdeeds, for example, school bullying or sex assaults will inevitably distress the sufferers and endanger the society. Hence, light penalty for felony is unwise. Conversely, stricter punishment for hardened criminals will not only embody the justice of law but also exert a deterrent effect on those potential malefactors.
【解析】
1. a prerequisite n一种必要条件
2. Taking the effects of misconduct and its motivation into consideration is a prerequisite for ensuring justice of the law. 考虑到犯罪的影响和动机是缺乏法律公正的先决条件。
3. School bullying or sex assaults will inevitably distress the sufferers and endanger the society. 性攻击或校园欺凌会不可避免地伤害受害者，危及社会安定。
4. Light penalty for felony is unwise. 重罪轻罚是不明智的。
5. Stricter punishment for hardened criminals will not only embody the justice of law but also exert a deterrent effect on those potential malefactors. 对于重刑犯的严厉处罚不仅体现法律公正，而且，可以震慑潜在的犯罪分子。
【尾段】总结立场
To sum up，there is no simple resolution for such a complicate social problem，it is reasonable to expect that the combination of these suggestions may be needed. Custom-tailored penalty may be the best strategy for each teenage crime.
【解析】
Custom-tailored penalty may be the best strategy for each teenage crime 对于每一种少年犯罪行为的量体裁衣的处罚措施也许才是最好的策略。
【创造感言】
本篇思维锋利如刀，文笔行云流水。每篇文本以亮剑的标准要求自己,力求完美,不留余地。 唯有厚积薄发,才能一飞冲天。江河浩瀚，始于点滴。千里之行，始于足下，我们要习惯像蚂蚁一样，聚沙成塔。
【经典语料】
1. the custom-made penalty n量体裁衣的处罚措施
2. violate the law = perpetrate the law v违反法律
3. conduct ant-social offences v 做出反社会行为
4. arouse one’s violent impulse v诱发了人的暴力的冲动
5. enable those who are led astray to make compensation for their misconducts v使那些误入迷途者对于他们的过失做出补偿
6. reflect on their evil lives v反思他们罪恶的人生
7. As for those hardened teenage criminals, the government should be urged to impose stricter penalty on them so that other potential young law-breakers can be deterred. 对于青少年惯犯而言，政府应该加大惩罚措施，这样可以震慑潜在的犯罪分子。
8. So immature and inexperienced are some youngsters that they tend to blindly imitate what they have seen, especially when they expose to pornographic movies and violent on-line games. 一些年轻人是如此不成熟，缺乏经验，以至于他们会盲目地效仿他们看到的一切，尤其是当他们接触到色情电影和暴力游戏的时候。
9. In this sense, their cause of committing crimes can be owed to the negative influence of the mass media. 因此，他们的犯罪原因可以被归结为商业化大众传媒的不良影响。
10. The young prisoners should be inspired and educated to serve the community to compensate for their misdeeds, sweeping the street can be a good in case in point. 少年犯应该被鼓励和教育去做社区服务，以弥补他们的犯罪行为，清洁街道也许就是很好的方法。
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